Tuesday, 22 March 2016

Check out my Pick - a - Path story so far...

Click this link to see my story: http://writer.inklestudios.com/stories/pg5r

I am only a few pages into it and you will find there are some dead ends. I would love some feedback about what could happen next on the pages I haven't yet written!

Leave me a comment below with your suggestions - a prize on the line for the ones I use!!

18 comments:

  1. I think what could happen could be that she/he went down for breakfast and he opened the door and piles of snow came sliding in.

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  2. I think you should do there was an earthquake or car crash or got lost driving to the airport. I think it was a great story and it is going to be great any way.

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  3. After when the flight was delayed and he or she got back into bed the windows smashed open and a tree fell on the roof and all the power went out.

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  4. I think that when you go to out for breakfast you see your friends, you hang out with them for awhile st the breakfast place and then you forget to check to see if the flight is back on.

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  5. After she got to the airport and in her flight the plane crashed in the middle of the ocean

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  6. Comment I like it because it has snow

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  7. I think that when she/he goes out for breakfast they have no power and the flight is delayed because all of the runways were snowy, instead of the toast toast getting burnt the toaster should set on fire.

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  8. Comment I liked your plot idea and because it had bacon

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  9. I like it because it's very interesting and detail.

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  10. you could write that you get there just in time but then you could find out its the wrong plane and its heading for a totally different place and you could have the option of just having your holiday in that place or you could wait for a plane going to where you want to go in that new place

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  11. Make a exciting bit like the plane crashes and he or she survives.

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  13. I think you could have written more for when people put in was delayed. You could have made it more interesting when he or she has more time to kill like going out to have fun in the snow or something like that.

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  14. You could have an option that the plane leaves as soon as you get to the air port and you have to wait 4 hours or something and he or she finds out the plane explodes in the air and hits the White House and the president dies and he or she decides to go back home but on the way ther he or she's car slips off the road and she or he wakes up in a hospital.

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  15. I like how you put food in it and had snow that mite of stop the flight

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